dude, dont post on the internet asking for a critique and just expect eveyone to be super supportive and cater to your every need. if you havent noticed, most everyone giving the crit say the exact same "go simple" spiel.
and its not like your gonna just POP! find a sick style out of nowhere, you develop a style after practicing. draw a lot! start filling up a sketchbook. dont post anything online, and when your book is COMPLETELY full look back at when you started and judge how far you have come. take a look at what you did wrong at first, then look at how you made it better. then take a look at what your still doing wrong, then work on that. it takes time, just draw!