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Feedback please... small sketch!

Discussion in 'Paper Chase' started by FIST, Feb 6, 2004.

  1. FIST

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    Feedback please... small sketch!

    Discussion started by FIST - Feb 6, 2004

    1st of all it's nice to be here, gr8 board you got here.
    2nd I don't know if it's ok to start my own thread for feedback but I haven't seen anything considering this at the FAQ section!
    well this is my sketch, pretty basic, it's my style now, most of my sketches look like this 1.
    I write "FIST" i just made this sketch for a small battle.
    any advice will be welcome.
    oh and sorry for the fucked up quality

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  2. Overtime

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    Overtime - Replied Feb 6, 2004

    the advice thread is for this, but its cool.
    its clean and what not, so thats cool
    i immediatly thought "virs changed again" though, which is bad
    not bad all in all those, maybe a cleaner picture
     
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  3. FIST

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    FIST - Replied Feb 6, 2004

    tnx for the reply, lol i know virs, i'm not him anyway.
    any tips? on what i can change? do better? add?
     
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    Overtime - Replied Feb 6, 2004

    personally i dont like how the s is, its hard to explain why, i also dont like how the letters connect, just let them be next to each other, not merging into each other, if that makes sense
     
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  5. AORAone

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    AORAone - Replied Feb 7, 2004

    simple, stick with simple for now how long you been writing?

    i know this thread is kinda old but i was just running through the threads on the first page here and saw it so meh.
     
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  6. FIST

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    FIST - Replied Feb 7, 2004

    I've been writing for something like a half a year.
    This is pretty simple... what kind of simple are you talking about?
     
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  7. StarzAbove

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    StarzAbove - Replied Feb 7, 2004

    its decent
     
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    he's sayin stay simple like that for a while, then you will progress. Most new cats try to go way to crazy at first or too soon, so dont do that is basically what is going on
     
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  9. why write?

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    why write? - Replied Feb 7, 2004

    its pretty good...i like it personally, keep it up
     
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  10. sies781

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    sies781 - Replied Feb 7, 2004

    not bad

    i think you should not fade out your lines and i would make the "a" and "f" the stand out letters. you know by having the "s" and "e" under the "a" and f." also i would have bigger holes in my "s" but thats just me.

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  11. InDY_500

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    InDY_500 - Replied Feb 7, 2004

    i like ur shit but the only thing u could do to improve it is work on ur S a lil bit....
    good shit though....keep working......
     
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  12. WrIot

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    WrIot - Replied Feb 8, 2004

    i agree
     
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  13. Philth215

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    Philth215 - Replied Feb 9, 2004

    i like the letters a lot but i would shape up the S its too thick and blocky and doesnt match the other letters its dope tho
     
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    AORAone - Replied Feb 10, 2004

    yes stay simple thanx for the explanation there onesecond couldnt have said it better myself. see, your problem with the "s" is that it has no holes between the lines which make it look scrunched up. theres not a problem with THAT but none of the other letters are like that, the "a" has a "hole" (heh a-hole) and the "f" and "e" are also open and not scrunched together like the "s" is. your letter format is colliding because of this. either open the hole on the "s" or scrunch the other letters to what the"s" looks like. but its actually not that bad.i like how you over laped and faded the letters and suprised you did it decently for the amount of time youve been writing. good job. feed us more.
     
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    BobotheHobo - Replied Feb 10, 2004

    .........ditto............
     
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