..romero.. Posted October 24, 2011 Share Posted October 24, 2011 what? his bars are actually pretty well proportioned.. all about the same width. i think the Y and I are your strongest letters here. the K needs work though. i would drop the bar thats closing up that negative space at the top of the K. it looks weird, you can close up alot of that negative space with the drop shadow and the outline that comes after it, or even a little bit that pops up in between the two bars. kinda like what you got going on with the YO combo, but suspended in air as opposed to connecting the letters. also you probably should have went with a more rounded O. thats my opinion. all in all its pretty good, i think you should drop the part where the bars over lap eachother, you over used that. it would probably look better if you would have the line STOP once it hits the next letter, so the outline doesn't over lap the other letters. idk how to explain that any further though. hope that helps. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
menthols Posted October 24, 2011 Share Posted October 24, 2011 the proportions r okay... but their still off, nuff said Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
n30n b0n35 Posted October 24, 2011 Share Posted October 24, 2011 Thx romero, feeling the crit. And menthols, i wouldnt crit people until u have some work posted to show you know what u are talking about. no beef. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
menthols Posted October 24, 2011 Share Posted October 24, 2011 lol you asked for advice not me homie, romero posted pretty much the same shit as me in diff terms. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ringworm Jim Posted October 24, 2011 Share Posted October 24, 2011 "No beef" Ha ha. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Big Teetas Posted October 24, 2011 Share Posted October 24, 2011 MEnthol is right. you could lose a few of the addon doo dads. But you have a basic structure to your style and its looking decent. The widths arent too bad though. also could be mistaken for reading yoKat. The K is kind of beat too. I think its the top and bottom of the right legs i dont like. That bit where you drew the line down then had the addon kick. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tramp.stamp Posted October 24, 2011 Share Posted October 24, 2011 what? his bars are actually pretty well proportioned.. all about the same width. i think the Y and I are your strongest letters here. the K needs work though. i would drop the bar thats closing up that negative space at the top of the K. it looks weird, you can close up alot of that negative space with the drop shadow and the outline that comes after it, or even a little bit that pops up in between the two bars. kinda like what you got going on with the YO combo, but suspended in air as opposed to connecting the letters. also you probably should have went with a more rounded O. thats my opinion. all in all its pretty good, i think you should drop the part where the bars over lap eachother, you over used that. it would probably look better if you would have the line STOP once it hits the next letter, so the outline doesn't over lap the other letters. idk how to explain that any further though. hope that helps. what are you even talking about? the bars are NOT the same width at all. i didnt even read past that. youre blind homie. if you cant even look at that and tell they aint the same youre on one. every letter draw got either fatter or skinnier. look at the middle of the y, the top of the o, the top of the k, the bottom and top of the a and the i. but its all still good. and THE I DOESNT EVEN LOOK LIKE A T. how would that begin to look like a t? geez Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tramp.stamp Posted October 24, 2011 Share Posted October 24, 2011 romero no hate, but just about all your advice ive seen you give is no good. you just talk to talk bro Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
..romero.. Posted October 24, 2011 Share Posted October 24, 2011 edit, nevermind. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kluse-One Posted October 24, 2011 Share Posted October 24, 2011 honestly eli your always saying that i havent progressed at all, and i usually just say okay but i honestly feel i have progressed... people have been telling me and i feel it myself... im not even the type to ego trip.... but watever... Yokai - hows japan or china (i cant remember) going ? how is the graff over there ? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kluse-One Posted October 24, 2011 Share Posted October 24, 2011 spin 183 convinced me to keep this name.. can i get a crit on these two cus i didnt get any Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
..romero.. Posted October 24, 2011 Share Posted October 24, 2011 second one is the best kline. i'd say make the L an upper case one instead. see how that works out. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Big Teetas Posted October 24, 2011 Share Posted October 24, 2011 im liking that second one. revise the widths and make all the same. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
giraffe pussy Posted October 25, 2011 Share Posted October 25, 2011 HAWAE. your name sounds like birthdaysurprisedownsyndromeguy.jpg sorry. ill start being productive.. kline, keep pacing yourself. looking better Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
n30n b0n35 Posted October 25, 2011 Share Posted October 25, 2011 Nice lookin out guys, ima work on it lol... till then here is this, just some fun for a friend. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cobber Posted October 25, 2011 Share Posted October 25, 2011 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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tramp.stamp Posted October 25, 2011 Share Posted October 25, 2011 i see hair on them arms;) ha. but anyway lookin good. fix the bottom f that r though man Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Doodle Posted October 25, 2011 Share Posted October 25, 2011 how is that "lookin good"???????? hate this thread! look at all those arrowzzz your shit is dope, can you come paint that on my wall in my room so i can look at it forever!! iMad Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Big Teetas Posted October 25, 2011 Share Posted October 25, 2011 Those arrows are silly. They just hang out the bottom, doing nothing. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Doodle Posted October 25, 2011 Share Posted October 25, 2011 check out the amazing ones on the left that cross..... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cobber Posted October 26, 2011 Share Posted October 26, 2011 either give me some constructive criticism or fuck off. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tha whut Posted October 26, 2011 Share Posted October 26, 2011 fuck you nigga we straight E-thugs out here fuck ur lyfee Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Doodle Posted October 26, 2011 Share Posted October 26, 2011 if you read ANY of this thread you would see the same crits to everyone, take off the dumbass arrows and do simples....but you're the guy that said simples are boring....so if you don't want to do them, then you'll get laughed at...so no need to cry about it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thebosdj Posted October 26, 2011 Share Posted October 26, 2011 Everyone ine here should kill themself. And someone post that surprise bday downsyndrome thing.. I havent seen it Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Big Teetas Posted October 26, 2011 Share Posted October 26, 2011 Heres a crit. Remove the arrows. They serve no purpose in balancing out your sketch. Which is why people do extensions, to fill in negative space and make their sketch feel balanced. You just did them, cause. there is no reason for those arrows to be there, therefore, they should be removed. But if you feel so strongly they should be there. tell us why? Its just like graphic design. You ask yourself, why did i put that there. If you cant come up with a reason, its probably best you just remove it. Cause it looks cool, isnt really a valid reason. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spawn-Of-Sham Posted October 26, 2011 Share Posted October 26, 2011 check out the amazing ones on the left that cross..... e thuggin swagged out. stop doin graff you all suck. only do simples cuz thats true wildstyle. never experiment because you need to progress. what? stupid shit that is said in here..... cob your pieces have alot going on bro. take the little add ons away from the next sketch and post it. also play with line weight. even a thicker sharpie line on all of it would help. dont stop using arrowz just place them more strategically homes. its like where did that arrow come from? also consistency is key. im not saying make everything one thickness just that you have some bars fatter or skinnier in certain places. i love variation if thickness dont get me wrong but for example were the leg of your g connects to the main bar is thinner than anything else. feels me? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
freakeenyc Posted October 26, 2011 Share Posted October 26, 2011 exactly what ruckus said...arrows should have a purpose and extensions shouldnt be forced...otherwise letter wise galor isnt too bad..i just think u should polish the letters first a tad more. also noticed ur 3d was off in a lot of spots work on tha Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kern Posted October 26, 2011 Share Posted October 26, 2011 Crits? I am not writing cast, just doing different words. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Big Teetas Posted October 26, 2011 Share Posted October 26, 2011 I dig that. But the bottom of the C is too thin. Keep it consistent. So id say match it up the the size of the S. Also revise your widths. They arent consistent. You have the Fatty T and S. and then the C and A go from fatty to small. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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