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constructive criticism

Discussion in 'Paper Chase' started by nozaki, Jun 19, 2004.

  1. nozaki

    nozaki 12oz Senior Member

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    constructive criticism

    Discussion started by nozaki - Jun 19, 2004

    it's obviously not a perfect outline, but i was just wondering what people thought of it...
    deno:
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  2. Fate2*88

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    Fate2*88 - Replied Jun 19, 2004

    Yo

    I'd like to see it painted. I like it. Um, did you get better? I'm not sure if I've seen any old work, but if it was as good as this piece i would have remembered it.

    Oh yeah, now looking at it carefully, maybe just take a little bit out of it, like some of the extensions look as though they serve no purpose. Don't get me wrong, I still like it, reminds me a little of my style, but still different none the less.
     
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  3. nozaki

    nozaki 12oz Senior Member

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    nozaki - Replied Jun 19, 2004

    thanks, but you might be mistaking me for another deno.... this is deno.hb (pennsylvania).
     
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  4. Fate2*88

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    Fate2*88 - Replied Jun 19, 2004

    Yeah probably

    Keep up the good work.
     
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  5. shani1985

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    shani1985 - Replied Jun 19, 2004

    nice one
    as Fate2*88 said - you really should paint it
     
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    InDY_500 - Replied Jun 19, 2004

    Thats some nice work sir...Are you gonna repost it after you color it?...Other then that, keep that shit goin man.....
     
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  7. CrazyLazy

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    CrazyLazy - Replied Jun 19, 2004

    Good stuff.
     
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  8. nozaki

    nozaki 12oz Senior Member

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    nozaki - Replied Jun 19, 2004

    i hardly color my outlines...i actually hardly draw outlines as of late. i've been freestyling a lot of pieces when i go to paint them, but i decided to buckle down and draw this one up...i guess i'll paint it soon. thanks for all the kind words guys
     
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    THE CORONER - Replied Jun 19, 2004

    not too shabby
     
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  10. eseLokE1uno

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    eseLokE1uno - Replied Jun 19, 2004

    looks good but i would cut down on the extensions a bit
     
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  11. StarzAbove

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    StarzAbove - Replied Jun 19, 2004

    It looks good need colors!
     
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    Angry Kids - Replied Jun 19, 2004

    looks good as a whole to someone who knows nothing about graff, but break it down and your letters aren't to great, i personally don't like it, but if you just looking for something wild then it's ok, work on less useless add on's and better letter structure
     
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  13. KiSe

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    KiSe - Replied Jun 19, 2004

    and work on that N
     
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    StarzAbove - Replied Jun 19, 2004

    Just remember this kid i know writes DENO in nyc!
     
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    nozaki - Replied Jun 20, 2004

    i appreciate the feedback. yeah, i put a lot of useless add ons in the piece on purpose, it was kind of a study on different add ons in a way.

    also, it's nice to hear someone hate on my letter structure, because i always thought it was lacking pretty badly, but my friends and crew always say not to worry about it.

    yeah, there are like 100's of deno's out there...
     
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