Not Really getting a good feeling from the last few canvases. Cyzm, I'm not accually sure what it is about the pieces, but I can tell your fundamentals are still lacking. The Way the Body is posed on the controlling your minds pieces is very rigid. Your faces are getting there, however I've never been fond of detailed but deformed heads on a stick like bodies. What's the goal of that piece, Are you going for an emmotion, a message. It all seems alittle thrown together. I can tell your deformed faces most likely come from a lack of undertsanding of the human head. The Body when broken down, like I said, is basically a stick figure in a jump suit, with some almost doll looking shoes. The Second piece, you showed an improved facial build, but the manner in which you put it on the canvas, to me, mabey not to any one else, looks like your again escaping the fact that you cannot propley put together a face. I also am thrown off by the background, I've seen you use it before. This piece also lacks an accual tight composition behind it. What was the reason you decided to arange the face bits in the way that you did? The color rectangles in the back, what purpose do they serve and why are they those colors. I've seen alot of your work. It is all very flat. I think your problem right now is the fact that you have no ways of putting down what you really want to, so you lay down sloppy, off the mark figurative pieces. Please I know It appears as though I'm coming at you and your work, which I am, but It's for a very good reason. I'd say really grill yourself on the fundementals, shadows, line, the figure, and so on. Then from there you'll have the foundation on which to build the art that you want to make.
Deciept, I belive you know alittle about composition, but your going about it all wrong. I dunno, I mean your prolly just your typical graffiti writer who doesn't get up, and decided hey, I can put my shit on a canvas. I sincerely hope not. Anyways, The figure in the lower left is very stiff. Also the composition of the piece leaves alot to be desired. Much like you I started off but huddling things into each corner. Are you familair with the rule of thirds? I can't really explain it over the internet, nor do I want to, nor will it make your pieces look much better, it's just something that helps some people out if they keep it in there head. Your on the right track, But it's really gonna be on your own developement as to where you decide how to place things.
Just one, what I have to say is, unless your basically a master of your craft ie. Zone or any of the writers how have seriously worked and developed there graffiti, and have done there thing inside of graffiti, I'd say stay away from graffiti on canvas. I mean Yeah your gonna be looked at by your local unschooled art peers as the coolest thing on the block with your poorly put together "graff art", but please just save your diginity for another day.
Well, I have droned on for far to long. If I offended any one, oh well, you'll live, and so will I.
And To Joker and all the people going through this thread who know there shit beyond and above, I'll be posting some of my works sometime in the near future wheni can get pictures and I'd really appreciate it if you'd critique them.
Thanks.
Peace Easy
